Wednesday, January 15, 2014

We're English 10 Nerds and Loving It: January 16, 2014

Focus: How can we create a three-dimensional universe in our memoir writing?

IMPORTANT ANNOUNCEMENTS:

YOUR FIRST DRAFT IS DUE AT THE END OF CLASS TODAY.

MS. LECLAIRE WILL BE  GRADING YOU BASED ON EFFORT AND PROGRESS MADE IN THE TIME FRAME OF CLASS TODAY (25 points in the Growth category).

MAKE SURE THAT YOUR ROUGH DRAFT IS SHARED WITH ME. IF YOUR ROUGH DRAFT IS NOT SHARED WITH ME, YOU WILL RECEIVE A ZERO.

My e-mail address: kleclaire@lps.k12.co.us

Also, 1st and 3rd hours need to post their premise (the one-sentence summary of your memoir) on the class blog.  See yesterday's class blog for examples from 6th hour.

1. Warm-up: Experiencing your five senses in action with a little clip (Mrs. Makovsky: click HERE)

a. First, you're going to LISTEN to the clip without watching it.  Just by listening, gather as much information as you can.  In your warm-ups document, type responses to the following:

  • Where is this scene taking place?  
  • What noises let you know where this place is?
  • What series of events unfold?
  • How many characters can you hear?
  • What can you infer about each character based on what they say?


b. Then, you're going to WATCH the clip without the sound.  Just by watching, add onto the information you typed above while listening to the clip.

c. Follow-up conversation:
What did you learn from watching the clip that you didn't get just from listening to it?
Which provoked a stronger sense of scene for you--sound, or vision?

d. The big idea:
Think about how much more powerful this would be if you could feel the vibrations of the airplane, smell that weird sterile smell of airplanes, taste what the characters were drinking and eating, etc.

Most writers use only their sense of sight when they start writing.  This is like watching the clip without sound; it offers the reader a two-dimensional picture, rather than a three-dimensional universe.  When you write and revise, strive to incorporate all five senses.  Strive to create a complete universe.

2. Editing your own writing and continuing to draft: Based on today's lesson, make edits to your writing to incorporate all five senses. Continue working hard on your draft until the end of class.  Add at least one more page by tomorrow.

HW:
1. Finish editing your draft to incorporate your five senses.

2. Add at least one more page to your draft so that you walk in tomorrow with two to three typed, double-spaced pages.



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